Native English speakers, would you please take a look at a few sentences here?
by admin in Languages | Posted on January 18th, 2010 | 3 Comments
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Would you please take a look at this paragraph and be so kind to suggest corrections needed? Thank you.
Tags:Billiard Club, Books, Native English SpeakersWould you please take a look at this paragraph and be so kind to suggest corrections needed? Thank you.
In order to motivate and inspire our members, *** organizes motivating actions at times. The first motivating action in this semester was a billiard tournament, held on November 1st in a billiard club in the city. About forty members took part in the tournament and formed groups of two to play. They all showed great skill and the winners were BB and DR, who won UJ and TJ in the finals. The winners received certificates and books as a praise.
Joel
January 19th, 2010 at 11:40 am
Dean
The last word should be “prize” not “praise.” You don’t need a comma after the word “tournament” in the second sentence. You do need a comma after “skill” in the next to last sentence and no comma after DR.
January 19th, 2010 at 4:10 pm
Louis
instead of praise, use prize.
aside from that its very good
I don’t know if every little grammatical detail is correct, as i am a high school student. But from what i saw it is very good.
January 22nd, 2010 at 7:01 pm
Elsie
In order to motivate and inspire our members, *** organizes OCCASIONAL motivating ACTIVITIES. The first motivating ACTIVITY this semester was a billiard tournament, held on November 1st AT a billiard club in the city. About forty members PLAYED in the tournament IN PAIRS . They all showed great skill and the winners were BB and DR, who DEFEATED UJ and TJ in the finals. The winners received certificates and books as PRIZES.